The Perfect Pitch

  • By: Jessica Faust | Date: Sep 26 2011

When I first queried editors about Bella Riley’s books I asked Bella to supply the pitch. This is something I frequently do because it helps give me a starting point for my own pitch. The one thing I say to authors when sending my request is, “Feel free to keep it rough. I’ll probably edit and change it anyway.”

Not the case for Bella Riley, and not the case with many other clients. Bella’s pitch was perfect. So perfect, in fact, that when I first queried her editor at Grand Central to ask if she’d be interested in seeing the proposal, the editor responded immediately with, “Wow. I’m not sure if I’ve been desperate for a vacation to the mountains or if you need a book deal yourself—could be both—but your pitch sounds awesome. I’d love to take a look.”

Don’t I wish it was my writing? I told her the pitch was straight from Bella herself, and it wasn’t long before we had a three-book deal.

Bella Riley is the contemporary romance pseudonym for erotic romance author Bella Andre. We like to think of these books as Bella Andre meets Susan Wiggs. Home Sweet Home is her first contemporary romance with Grand Central, and here’s the pitch that got her that deal:

After thinking she had left Emerald Lake – and the girl she had once been – behind forever, Andi Powell must return for one more summer at the lake to save her family’s knitting store. She isn’t prepared for Nate Turner, the boy from the wrong side of the tracks that she’d always loved from afar, to have turned into a man who takes her breath away. She isn’t ready for his determined sensual plays for her body . . . and her heart. And she definitely isn’t prepared to discover that the darkness he hides so well from everyone else tugs at her heart – and makes her wonder if leaving again is really the right thing to do after all.

But with the help of the Thursday Night Knitting Group, Nate’s sister, Andi’s mother and grandmother, and a pair of missing carousel horses, Andi just might find the love she’s always deserved in the arms of the one man who has waited his entire life for her to come back and heal the hole in his heart with her love.


15 responses to “The Perfect Pitch”

  1. Avatar Anonymous says:

    A romanced Friday Night Knitting Club?

  2. Avatar ryan field says:

    The pitch sounds like it would be good back cover copy, too.

  3. Avatar Kate Douglas says:

    Knowing what a wonderful writer Bella is, this one has caught my interest, too. It's all about the voice, isn't it?

  4. Avatar Anonymous II says:

    Thanks to the first Anonymous for saying what I was thinking.

    I find this trite, poorly written, and derivative. It reads like the romance equivalent of "Elves and men reforge their ancient alliance to defeat an evil that threatens the world."

    Why would something so Mad-Libs plug-and-play be intriguing as a romance when it would be laughable in any other genre?

    I hope Kate Jacobs sues the pants off of Riley if this ever goes to press.

  5. Avatar Tiffany says:

    I, for one, loved the pitch so much that I've added the book to my "Must Buy in October" list.

  6. Avatar Danielle says:

    I suppose this pitch is perfect for this genre of book, however since I don't read contemporary romance, it does nothing for me. Do pitches follow pretty much the same formula as queries?

  7. Avatar jfaust says:

    Yes Danielle: A pitch is similar to a query and were Bella Riley to have queried me this is probably what she would have used. And yes, a pitch won't work for you, an agent, or an editor if you're not looking for books in that genre. This was obviously the perfect pitch for a number of editors, but all of those editors are seeking contemporary romance.


  8. Avatar Leslie says:

    Condensing the tone, storyline, and emotional element of a book into a handful of carefully chosen words is an exacting task. I can appreciate Bella's gifts . . . and applaud her myriad talents.

  9. Avatar Vivi says:

    This makes me want to read it!

  10. If I ever get around to writing that book on music, I hope my pitch is perfect.

    (Feel free to groan at will.)

  11. Avatar Jill James says:

    That pitch had me in tears at the end. They just HAVE to find true love, don't they??

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